Beginning Friday, February 29th and appearing every Friday that follows, I’ll be writing an online novella one chapter at a time one week at a time. From the seat of my pants. Who knows if it’ll suck or if it’ll flow well, make sense, or have any merit whatsoever. Regardless, it’s going to happen and I hope you’ll come along for the ride. – Nick.
Prologue
I was twenty-five
years old when The God arrived.
I remember
going through my father’s tackle box looking for the gold spinner lure we used
to catch rainbow trout and finding that soiled knife. The knife he was holding
when the dock broke. The blade was thick with grime from gutted fish, sliced up
earthworms, and who knows what. Yet there it was. I faintly recall my aunt
Janie meticulously gathering everything from the lake after the funeral and
neatly arranging it in the shed behind our summer cabin. Like nothing bad had
ever happened. She’d even gotten that knife, which had to have been at the
bottom of the lake after the accident. Never asked her how she did that. She
went above and beyond.
I also faintly recall going into the tackle
box a few times in the decade since he died, sometimes looking for something to
fish with and sometimes looking for something that made it easier to remember
my father. Everything in there was caked in memories of him. Oftentimes, I was
stymied on both accounts, whether by fear of the rising emotions or the fact
that fishing never took on the same significance in his absence. That day I was
determined to show my newest lady friend I knew how to conduct my manly
business with a stick and some thread.
Then
everything went belly up.
The flash of
light. The impact. The sound of a magnetic nothingness. Everyone on the planet
felt the presence of The God at precisely the same moment. I was reeling in a
lure very slowly when it happened, a little crank and tug before the spinner
caught the light to tell the trout that the dinner bell was sounding. Clara sat
behind me nursing a beer and laughing at my lack of style when it happened and
I instantly thought of terrorism. Knee jerk reaction back in the day. You heard
a big boom and it was on. The Rags were invading our space again. That was the
knee jerk. Reality was a concussive force and then the physics which followed.
I fell on my
ass, but she wasn’t laughing any more.
Human beings
are pretty spiffy but the animal parts of the brain and the neurological
impulses which fire in times of heavy shock remind us that we’re not as special
as our air-conditioned homes would lead us to believe. Regardless of creed or
culture, we all knew the jib was up for us when it first washed over us that
blistering summer day.
The God chose
a field in upstate New York to be its Ground Zero. Fitting I suppose. It was a
serene enough place, cows and red barns and the whole nine. A six thousand foot
chunk of jagged rock standing in the middle of it all was just another
skyscraper in the state with the most famous ones in history.
Our history.
The thing
stood there casting a shadow somehow miles long despite the time of day. It
hovered an inch above the ground and it could be seen from twenty miles away,
some sort of cosmic optical illusion. It could be seen from space, as witnessed
by the astronauts unlucky enough to be in orbit during its arrival. They all
came down to Earth in embers. So did the satellites and so did most of the commercial
and military aircraft en route to wherever they thought they were going. The
God seemed to issue an unspoken mandate on mankind’s desire to fly, a stamp
marked “No” witnessed by Notary Public and sealed with a wicked kiss of instant
death to all who defied it. My sister Kate was a flight attendant and it was
only later I discovered that she was lucky enough to be judged by The God in
that first fell swoop.
But here I
still sit, aged like a cheap wine and with more stories and theories than
minutes on my own life’s clock. I sit still and remember. Memory is the only
freedom we have now, an offering from a vengeful God.
The God’s
minimal grace was a bouquet of flowers compared to the work of Its Followers.
They arrived much later. Right about after we got used to the idea of a whole
and pure power standing tall above us and owning our every move.
Its Followers
snuck in the back door.





21 comments
Wow. Nick I love reading your blog and wasn't expecting something like this. Impressive.
Nice. I'm very interested to see where it goes. It reminds me a little of a book I read a few years ago about a giant glowing alien sphere that landed in a remote American field and offered all of humanity immortality.
Okay, I'm in. Take us somewhere, holmes.
So far so good. One thing: Isn't the phrase supposed to be, "the jig was up" not jib? or is that some kind of regional thing?
This bit of writing isn't so bad, the stories on this site are mired in passive voice sentences. And of course the first person POV.
Wait, I guess that's why they're being published on chud rather that somewhere else, where craft counts.
Nice one Nick. I'm looking forward to the next part.
Will we actually see a satisfying end to this or will it turn out like all the comic and movie ideas that disappear into the ether as soon as you lose interest?
Frito, the Prologue and chapter breaks are in 1st person but the bulk of it isn't. Since I'm doing this on the fly… yes there will be plenty of things to bitch about structure and grammar-wise. But, then again… it may be better than you'd expect from a site where apparently craft doesn't count.
Oh, and regarding me apologizing for myself, losing interest, etc…
Actually I still do all the comics and stuff I've started, I just do them on the down low so that when they are DONE I can share them. So, go put your balls into your ass.
Thanks, but if I want to read a novella or a serial novel, I'll follow an author who actually intends to put effort into it and not apologize for it/excuse himself from accountability in the intro to the first part.
I was going to bitch about the quality, effort and commitment you put into this post, but it looks like three idiots beat me to it. So, instead I'll just read along until it ends or until I lose interest. In the meantime maybe Frito, yodo and three oranges (their parents must have wished for abortions to give them such bad handles) will find something productive to do, beside bitch about free entertainment (like meet girls).
Damn i love this. it starts with the down home country feel of a day of fishin' and boozin and ramps up to somewhere between a disaster story, religious revelation or straight up sci fi. the fact it's ambiguous enough to go in any direction hooks the reader and makes us want more! Very kool. I spend most of my life in upstate ny, so where this sucker landed specifically would be nice to know. Are we talking backwoods north like plattsburgh or western lakwe country by buffalo? or just outside the nyc burroughs or even nassau county by albany? the topography changes a little, but i guess really it shouldn't matter this early in. though the one detail i think might be fun, esp for fanfare and possible visual impact, would be something detailed about the brief lead up and impact of the monolith. was there a rumble as it knifed through the air? just a light whoosh? and did the impact concussion the state with not only the groundquake.. but a ripple of strong, cold ozone laden air? … or was it something that came from the ground up, etheral for a moment, then settling with gravity… so many possibilities.. love it. kudos man!!!
DIG IT.LOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEXT INSTALLMENT, BUT IM SECRETLY HOPNG GOD TURNS OUT TO BE KTHULU
This will go the the way of all Nick's other countless vanity projects – nowhere.
Such a big ego for such a little man.
At least it's comprehensible, I suppose. God, let me never stumble across another Ron cartoon…
Call me!
"The sound of a magnetic nothingness."
Huh?
Haha, that was a boring mess. At least it was coherent.
I realise that you run the site and are expecting thumbs-up's from all your fans, but don't quit your day job.
As someone stated above, all these vanity projects of yours are average at best.
I've yet to read a good short story or novel posted straight to the internet.
"Human beings are pretty spiffy but the animal parts of the brain and the neurological impulses which fire in times of heavy shock remind us that we’re not as special as our air-conditioned homes would lead us to believe."
What are you trying to make of yourself? That sentence reads like the greatest work a schoolboy with Downs Syndrome has ever written throughout the ages. Pat yourself on the back for the retards.
Nick, I appreciate what you're doing, using your clout here to put your writing out in front of everybody — but putting it out there invites comment. That takes balls — even if they are jammed into your ass. And hey, I did say that this piece wasn't so bad.
The thing about writing well is that you can't just do it on a whim. It is a craft that takes constant, diligent work to do well.
The problem with the stories posted to Chud are numerous. There's no editing to speak of. If you haven't heard the phrase 'murder your darlings,' well, it's an idea all serious writers are familiar with. Here's another; show don't tell. Familiar adage. That's the problem with first person POV from beginning writers; they use perspective as a crutch to tell the reader what happened.
Obviously, you make your living writing words and have to great success — this website is testament to that. But you haven't made your living making narratives that engage readers — and sorry, I don't think set visits and orgiastic rants or raves about the newest Marvel movies count.
I've seen you on TV, read your stuff. You're witty. But wit doesn't make a writer. Dedication to a craft does.
Next question is who the fuck am I? Just a guy that's been working hard and collecting rejection slips. Trying to pay some dues. And ultimately, getting someone to pay me for the honor of printing my work. Not doing it in my own sandbox.
Every friday is not enough,write faster cuz i dig it.
I'm intrigued, keep up the good fight Nick! Look forward to future chapters.
Nice; oh dark minded one, makes for a good night's reading on devil's island.
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